The Second went in –
We watched it on live TV –
and everything changed.
Real-time, slow motion –
History before our eyes –
Like a big movie.
Very few wounded –
Grey dust, choking ~ engulfing –
Choice without choice: Jump.
September blue skies –
Go black, an eclipse ~ darkness –
Skyline is changing.
Ghosts emerging ~ White –
After the roar, silence, ‘cept –
Uncertain sirens.

http://promisingpoetsparkinglot.blogspot.com/2011/09/perfect-poets-award-for-poets-rally_23.html
Extremely powerful haibun. I also wrote about this. Here’s my entry:
http://wordcoaster.wordpress.com/2011/09/11/dawn-turns-to-mourning/
I gave this poem an excellent, but I couldn’t make myself “like” it.
Understood, thanks. I seem to be doing ‘haibun’ without realising it, must visit wikipedia 😉
Effective lines reflecting true feelings, and reality before the eyes is well captured.’Come September is not the Love Theme anymore.
You should visit dVerse and submit this there it is so fitting and the would be a great entry for this
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/08/the-crimson-witch/
this is an amazing collective haiku! heavy imagery about 911 being portrayed in each 5-7-5 stanzas!
here is my entry: http://wp.me/pTDjw-qx
Eerie it was to see the hospital personnel waiting lined up for the injured to arrive–so stunning when it became apparent there were very few. That’s what your write made me recall. Well done.
Damn. Riveting, powerful, emotional. It took two reads for me to catch what was really happening. It was portrayed masterfully though, every line absolutelty necessary, every word pulling it’s weight. Great job.
convincing words.
powerful imagery …
wow! great poem very powerful and moving!
it made me remember the not to be remembered moment
Thanks for all of your comments, your feedback is much appreciated.
This poem remains mysterious to me and the wording draws me in. ~MsQ
haunting poem about a haunting moment in history
Thank you Poetry Palace for the Perfect Poets Award for Poets Rally Week 52:
http://promisingpoetsparkinglot.blogspot.com/2011/09/perfect-poets-award-for-poets-rally_23.html
I nominate wordcoaster for the next award
http://wordcoaster.wordpress.com
well deserved award, thanks.
There is still time for you to join poets rally week 52, share a free verse today.
happy writing.