Tails
This deep dream we share –
Of jumping high and so far ~
Ancestor echoes.
Fire
Our backs to the fire –
Facing into the deep dark –
Some watch while some sleep.
Flint
The flint is fashioned –
Nodule to tool ~ final form –
Seen in the mind’s eye.
Mammut
Felled mammoth’s last breath –
Comes after much waiting ~ watched –
We give it its time.
Rivals
The dark ones attack –
We shield the women –
We kill ~ no remorse.
Fall
All mums are busy –
Gathering the ripened fruits –
A time to take stock.
Meat has given us time ~ now –
We shape the world ~ bit by bit.
Image
Blow paint on the hand –
Leaves a mark on the cave wall –
Wave to the future.
Ice
The Ice grows bigger –
Scouring away all our work –
and so we move South.
We meet the others ~ a truce –
The first child ~ hybrid vigour.
Passing
Mammoths excepted –
We’re the only animal –
That tends to our dead.
Rise
As leaves slowly fall –
Viewed ~ a new phenomenon –
Someone feels for them.
Great work!!
Liked it..
Alcina
Awesome imagery and a perfect flow to the words. Great story of ancient times.
My offering for this week: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/25/she-sat-alone-2/
special i would say! glad to be of acquaintance through thursday rally.. my posting this week.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2011/08/04/strength-of-faith/
I am so caught up in trying to view history from a greater perspective right now and this… This just hit home! Amazing work! Thank you for sharing!
this is good.
reflections and experiences are helpful to let go and move on.
🙂
Keep up the good work …
Very Nice Poetry with an amazing Imagination
Great Work of Creativity !! Highly Expressive !!
It was indeed enjoyable after reading this one !!
Anyways, Take a look some of my Poetry Collections …
http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/category/talent-underground/poetry-zone/
some of my Haiku Collections
http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/category/creative-challenges/the-haiku-challenge/
and also, on my very recent Work as well
http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/2011/08/15/india-of-my-dream/
!!! Happy Rally !!!
Cheers !!
I really love the way this develops. We’ve all wondered what it must have been like to live then. We babble on a lot today about living in the moment. Perhaps in part that is a longing back to that more immediate existence.
Wonderful haibun! Really like Image and Passing. 🙂
Thanks for all of the comments. Six months into the project now, and have done 70 poems. More themes to come. Thanks to jingle for invites also.http://promisingpoetsparkinglot.blogspot.com/2011/08/agreement-for-thursday-poets-rally-week.html
Ohhhhhhhh, Ohhhhhhhhh, Ohhhhhhhhhhh! Wow! Duncan Cleary, you are incredible.
http://kaysalady.wordpress.com/2011/08/30/my-mind-is-frozen/
Very good. A nice fluid movement of images as I read your post.
Check out my entry @ http://wp.me/p1LMFk-2N
A wonderful project!
Thank you Ina.
How interesting to go into the mind of ancient people. Nicely structured.
Larry
Very Nice! Keep it up! ^^
http://ankokuhikaru.wordpress.com/2011/07/01/poetry-rose-masquerade/
wonderful work of the pre-historic era..
keep up the good work.
my poem for the rally, if you could comment too:
http://veronicadimarco.wordpress.com/2011/08/27/the-sandman/
Wisely done! Great imagery too!!
Thanks folks, very much appreciated, I will try to reciprocate your visits.